This is the first chapter of a story I wrote, pls leave any feedback. I have more on a site called wattpad so if you like it my username is The_Hawaiian_Sloth
i also use wattpad and i kind of had writers block but your a talented writer as i read your story and loved it most readers love long chapters so keep that in mind
Amazing Story! My only critque, would to have someone else you know check it, or read it aloud. If you do that you can see fi the story makes sense or not. Other than that AMAZING! ::)))
