Would this be a good story to tell???

Once apron a time there live a scary phantom and she had a physical problem with her had see win she was a human she got in a car wreck with her mom, her mom was fine but she was not, she suffered from censor or so she thought , she whisper to her mom that she will be alright but a few minutes later she becomes a phantom and she can't give her mom a hug what is the phantom's name you mite ask well her name is galaxy and her mom still loves her nonmatter what and cool phantom she is and galaxy is not a scary phantom anymore she is a good and cool phantom but the reason why she was a scary phantom is because she thought her mom was dead but she is able to be with her mom again but as a phantom and they live happily ever after the end.